I like it! I think you chose just the right music for it and it works well. However you need to fade the music out at the end instead of just cutting it off. You may want to think about lowering the audio level of the song when you have your speaking part just so that we can hear you better. Then you can bring the music back up to end it. I do think you need more close ups though. In that shot where you are pouring the sugar out of the box, you hold it for too long. Right after that you need a closeup of the bowl of sugar so we can really see what came out of the box. One other thing to keep in mind, it looks like you did a few takes of the sugar being poured out but you didn't clean up the spilt sugar well enough. You can see the sugar on your counter in your very first shot and you can hear the crunch your bowl makes when it lands on the spilt sugar on the counter. Also in your shot where you say, "That much sugar in one cereal?", that needs to be changed to, "That much sugar in one BOWL of cereal?" By leaving out the word bowl you now are saying that one cereal flake has that much sugar in it when you really mean a bowl or serving of cereal. I would also consider having someone else do a voice over of your titles at the end. I don't think it should be you since you already had a speaking part. See if you can get a classmate with a clear voice to say that at the end. Try it out and see how it sounds. If you like it, keep it in. If you prefer to do it without you can keep it out. Keep working! Nice job!