Hiki No Franchise Piece (Improved)

8/30/2016

Mr. M

9/1/2016 01:20:28 am

This is getting much better. I like how you showed yourselves using an aloha shirt at dinner. However the shot of aloha shirts in a store moves. Maybe make that a freeze frame instead as I don't want to see the camera move if it's not a clean pan or movement across. You also have to decide where you are going to film the entire piece. You have here clips from the summer shot in our library and then the rest is shot at home at the kitchen table. I think it looks better at home but you will need to adjust the camera angles a little to let us see more of what you are doing. The shot of you decorating the finished aloha shirt only shows your hands. I can't see what you are doing. An extreme close up here would be a good cut in to use. I also don't see the facial expression of the person doing the folding. Remember that it's a good practice to use those types of inserts to show the action/reaction happening here. Your color of your paper changes too, from white to blue. You'll need to stick to one color. Also try not to shift the angle of your camera from one side to the next. You start off one one side and then in your next shot you cross over to the other side. This confuses people so stick to one side. Your background audio in those shots need to be lowered a little too. Don't take them completely out, just lower them a little. I also want to see closer shots of the folds. Remember that you are doing a how to video and the larger you can show the folds on the screen, the easier it is to follow. Have you considered shooting a birds eye view from directly above? That might make it look easy to follow. Finally, show me what one looks like as a gift tag. You mention it but don't show it. This is getting there but it needs more work. Keep going! Good to great!
3 points = B

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